Posts Tagged ‘feedback’

The Beach

Posted: September 19, 2013 by rosalindayli in creative writing, Schoolwork
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As i pick up the sand, the touch of the soft, silky and velvety sand quietly glides through my filtering hands. I can feel the cool texture in my warm hands. The sea edged like ice-cream mirrors the melting blue crystal sky. The mossy feeling of the groynes splinter my fingers.

This is my first draft i would really appreciate some feedback and i would like to know which sentence was stronger then the others. Thank you……
HI year 11

This blog started as a bit of an experiment.

It’s reached the time when we need to review it. We need to ask ourselves and others lots of questions. If you follow our blog, and we know that people do who often don’t comment, we want your opinions. We want to know what posts and topics you have enjoyed, what things have made you come back.

  • what has been good?
  • what would we like to keep?
  • what might we do differently?
  • what would we like to change? (more…)