Animal Poems

Posted: June 26, 2013 by pupilsinevelina in general

The Miraculous Eagle

Deepening brown eyes like a golden river

Brown eye catching hot tea

The eagle’s beak is as pointy as the top of the Eiffel tower

A sharp pointy knife

Feathers as furry as a poodle

Furry magnum ice-cream

The eagle soars and flies high like a kite

The eagle is a kite in the sky

Sharp vampire like talons

Long sharp talon claws


  1. INC says:

    I like the structure of this very much, the repetition really works, and your opening simile grabbed my attention. I am less sure about the hot tea metaphor. It sounds rather down to earth and domestic for this miraculous bird, but that may be because I dislike tea.
    I would very much like to see a second draft of this poem with you refining your imagery, and taking the reader on a flight with this eagle.

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