The Waves

Posted: September 28, 2012 by dukefrederick in creative writing
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What Age Audience  Is This Supposed To Be For?

Give constructive comments and criticism please.

 

Sarah sat on the sandy,dry,warm  beach . She could feel the sand soft beneath her feet. The sun shone, and through her sun glasses

she watched the waves . The waves were very tidy. They looked like a chorus line of dolphins;  good waves for surfing on .

It was a bright early morning. The waves seemed to be the only other presence. The village seemed very quiet , people walking with out a peep coming out of their mouth . She loved the peaceful quality of France.

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Comments
  1. Inc says:

    You have an original turn of phrase rlm. I should like to see more f your writing. Have you ever tried poetry?
    I know what age group you were writing for, so I shan’t give the game away. You worked we’ll on this. Well done. 🙂

  2. ROH says:

    This was a very interesting piece of work. It is well righten and makes me want to read more. 🙂 I would say that your target audience would be young adults 14 upwards.

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