100 Word Challenge – Five Words

Posted: January 25, 2012 by INC in Flash fiction, fun
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This week, we are going for the 5 word prompt. Here they are:

Silver Tiny Paris Birthday Jumped

You have another 100 words to write a really creative piece to share with everyone. If you are a new visitor here do read ‘How to join 100WC’

The link will be open until 31st January

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  1. dls says:

    Today was my birthday; I have turned thirteen, finally! Hopefully my brother won’t call me tiny Tim no more, just because I’m the youngest.
    I ran down the stairs and opened my presents. The best present was the silver watch. Now it’s time to open the letters, letters are boring, but wait; this letter had a ticket in it, a ticket to Paris “OMG!”
    “I’m going to Paris!” I screamed, I’ve always wanted to go to Paris, I jumped in the air with happiness, “when I get there, I’m going to the Eiffel tower” I Mum.
    I’m so excited!!!

    by dls y8

    • ROH says:

      I really like this piece of work I felt like I was there with Tim. the one criticism that I have is that you have put “I mum” in the last line and I don’t quite know what you meant but other than that I enjoyed your work a lot 🙂

  2. roo says:

    Terry was very excited about his birthday. He was going skydiving in Paris. As the day and night by very slowly he was waiting for hours he left for his plane. Two tiny hours he arrived at the hotel. And then to go back to the airport to sky dive. He got on the plane at the airport 400ft feet high Terry jumped with fear. He zoomed down…………….. He was opened his white see-through parachute. And the shine of the sun smashed through the parachute making it shine like a silver spotlight. Good luck Terry. . . .To be continued

    • ROH says:

      I really like the way that you used descriptive words in your work to give it more dimensions. The only thing is that you are missing a few words her and their and it really makes your work hard to read easily. I t could also do with being read out loud so that you can hear where a word is missing or were it could do some punctuation like full stops, capital letters, comas and apostrophes etc. But I did really enjoy your work and I’m looking forward to reading the next part of the story.

  3. Manuela says:

    Dear Dis,
    I loved the way your incorporated the five prompt words into you 100 word challenge. The story flowed naturally, and nothing seemed ‘forced’. I thought it was clever to turn the word ‘tiny’ into a name, and link this to your turning 13. This one line alone revealed to the reader a lot about your relationship with your older brother, and it brought a smile to my face.
    I can also see that you made a real effort to apply a variety of punctuation marks. Well done.

  4. Dear Dis,
    You have amazed me with your work! You have used a variety of punctuation marks and my favorite (I seem to find hard in my work) is the semi colon. I love how you have used the word tiny as a nae and linked it very well with the rest of your story. Well Done! From Ross at http://www.6d.highlawnpriary.net

  5. INC says:

    Well done, dls.
    Are you ready to try the new challenge?

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