Flash FICTION Challenge 6th May 2011

Posted: May 6, 2011 by INC in Flash fiction
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This week’s challenge has been set by BGB. Your story must be inspired by the photograph below, which she has chosen.

The word limit is one thousand words.

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  2. fr says:

    I was out in a storm and it was scary!
    “What was so scary?” you ask…
    Well, the sounds of thunder echoing around the dark, black sky; the feel of the rain pouring down on my brand new clothes causing tears to flood out of my eyes! As I glance around all I see are sudden flashes of light striking fear into my heart.

  3. BGB says:

    The Storm
    The tide began to rise and the sun began to set, nature was warning fern what time it was. As she jumped up a breeze blew right pass her, fern knew there was a storm on its way and she needed to get home to the farm animals to let them into the barn.
    With a hop, skip and a jump she was off. Past the corner shop, over the wall and through the valley, up the hill and into the farm. All the animals knew a storm was coming so they waited to go inside the barn. Fern opened the door to the barn and all the animals scrambled inside. Fern counted and checked the animals then ran off into the farmhouse.
    Not far from the house ferns brother, Julian was running home from the animal reserve where he works but when he got to the valley he saw a little kitten which was wet and looked freezing cold limping on the path. So Julian picked up the kitten, wrapped it in his coat and continued on with his journey home. When he reached home he went upstairs to check on his sister and show her what he had found. Fern adored the cat and played with it a lot.
    It wasn’t long before the kitten felt right at home, fern & Julian had given it some warm milk, a blanket, some juicy fresh fish & fern also named it peaches. Suddenly there was a big thunder crack and a lightning strike as pink as a blackberry stain on a white T-shirt, peaches hated storms she was so scared that she managed to jump into a draw but Julian & fern were good friends and comforted peaches through the whole storm and peaches soon overcame her fears.
    And they all lived happily ever after!!!
    BY
    BGB

    • Manuela says:

      Dear BGB
      I absolutely LOVED your flash fiction inspired by the lightening photograph.

      There is a wonderful symmetry in the first two clauses of your opening sentence that drew me right into the story. ‘The tide began to rise and the sun began to set, nature was warning fern what time it was.’ As she jumped up a breeze blew right pass her, fern knew there was a storm on its way and she needed to get home to the farm animals to let them into the barn.’

      I liked the way the actual photograph is only really directly referenced at the very end of your piece of flash fiction and the way the story is centered on Fern, her brother and their relationship with the kitten.

      I thought you used some wonderful ‘action’ vocabulary and I loved the very effective similie ‘as pink as a blackberry stain on a white T-shirt’ (even though my blackberry’s stain my T-shirts a deep purple rather than a pink!?! … I fancy yours!)

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