IT was a family affair

Posted: September 27, 2010 by ROH in news, Pupil, ROH, Schoolwork
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David Miliband refused to comment after losing to his younger brother.
The shadow foreign secretary said “this is not a conference about me, it’s a conference about Ed’s leadership of the party, “he told sky news when he was asked why it was taking so long for him to say whether he would serve in the shadow cabinet, he replied “I arrived here on Saturday planning a slightly different week”
David Miliband was the favourite to win at the start of the campaign was beaten by Ed in May at 1.3% of the vote.
Labour MP voted on who would be elected and what precision they would take at least 46 Mp’s confirmed id that they would stand
It went from 46 MP’s tow a tow manned race and ended with tow brothers fighting for the same position but only one could get the place David was the favoured brother to win but Ed won the tow brothers seam to be happy for one and other but only time will tell weather this will persist

  1. evelinasec says:

    Hi ROH
    Nice topical post. Well chosen.
    I like the quick moving style of your writing here.
    You need to tidy it up a bit; check your punctuation, capital letters (including in the title), and story flow.
    There are a couple of places where I feel that you have jumped ahead too quickly, leaving me, the reader, rather lost. Also, when you start talking about the start of the campaign, I feel there’s room for a little mor information to give greater clarity.
    Look again at how you start your post. How could you improve it so that everyone is clear from the first sentence what you are talking about? What is the context?
    I like the photo, but I really would like to know when it was taken. Was it before or after the results were announced?

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